FH and I have 2 children together and he has a son from a previous relationship. I want the officiant to include them in the ceremony (not the vows, I want the vows to be just for us). I have put together this reading from bits and pieces of others and added my own stuff in too. What do you think of it? Is it too long? Too cheesy? Any suggestions? I wanted it to be light and meaningful with a little bit of humor, but I don't know how to add in the humor either! I also don't want it to end that way but I'm drawing a blank as to what else I could say to conclude and on a good note to begin our vows afterwards!
Please help!
*Posting it below because it's probably too long*