Unplugged Wedding Wording

View Quoted Comment She asked for advice on her unplugged wedding wording. Specifically how it sounds. That's pretty broad and encompasses everything to do with the wording, including the tone it portrays and how it makes the reader feel. What else did she want for feedback other than how it came across to each person? If it was just grammatical feedback then specificity can really helps prevent getting feedback on other aspects.

OP I really am sorry that you've taken people's comments personally. People honestly aren't trying to attack you, they only want to help. I even gave you tweaks for the wording of the poem along with the comments on how it came across to me. Please dont let this deter you from using the forums. Try to take the comments at face value and understand that all they're telling you is how that comes across to them personally. It totally up to you as to whether or not you act on the feedback but at least you have the whole picture.

As an objective observation my only comment is yes, poems are demeaning to adults. I appreciate anyone's desire for unplugged ceremony, but I would rather be told outright by a sign or by your officiant. That is lovely that it is part of your personality, but when you asking for something you leave personality out of it if you want to be taken seriously.

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I am all for an unplugged ceremony but I am not into rhymes. It sounds too sing-songy and sounds like you are talking down to them.

I would simply say, via the officiant, "Please silence your phones and no photography during the service please."

If you are having programs, put it in there, too.

Edited to add: did not realize this thread got a little heated.

Sara - this is (and I say this with love) an awesome forum where people will give their opinions, and it comes off as blunt. This is good because your family and friends will not tell you an idea is not the best plan because they are polite and they love you! (Well my sister will tell you but that is a story for another day, lol!)

A poem is not my thing but if you like it - have it!

I think it sounds great! Do what you want. It's your wedding and no one else's. We will have our officiant make an announcement at the beginning. But I am happy no one can live stream or ceremony because the us no cell phone service at the venue.